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Post by Missy R. on Jun 17, 2015 6:49:52 GMT -6
So I came up with a fun little idea for a forum game that may help people who want to become better writers. You know the saying "show, don't tell"? Well it doesn't matter whether or not this rule is bullcrap, it's just a fun exercise to take simple sentences and turn them into something that actually demonstrates how a person feels about something.
So the aim of this game is to read the simple sentence above you and expand on it to actually show what is happening. And then, for the next person involved, you can give them a simple sentence for them to expand on.
For example:
Telling: "Shannon started to feel cold at night as she waited for her friend."
Showing: "Minutes after the sun set, the chill of the dark night set in, and Shannon chattered her teeth. Her sweater was not enough to stave off the biting cold, but she had to wait until her friend would congregate at the meeting spot they had set up. As a measure of defense, she wrapped her arms around her chest and snaked her hands under her armpits which had generated enough warmth to stop them from turning blue."
You can go on for as long or as short as you like, just as long as it is clear you have expanded on the original sentence.
Also, you can even include your characters as subjects of the sentence if you wish!
Here's your starting sentence.
"Janice felt sad because her cat died."
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melty
Full Member
^p^ cute anime girls
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Post by melty on Jun 17, 2015 12:34:22 GMT -6
Man I haven't done some writing in a long time.
It hadn't been long since then. None of the condolences, or the cards that sloppily piled her desk did any help. There was a rupture in her day to day; the cans buried in the pantry, the marks on the table legs. He had gone, but those things remained.
Okay so my sentence is, "Haruto is bored and hungry."
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nemi
Apprentice Member
barakatsu
Posts: 125
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Post by nemi on Jun 17, 2015 12:36:00 GMT -6
A loud grumble interrupted...well, nothing really. Haruto was just in his room, listening to music. At least, he was several minutes ago. Now he was just bored! He looked over at the clock and blinked. 2:30PM. He had woken up at 12, like he always does on weekends. He didn't even want to be awake now. But here he was, his stomach sounding like the call of Armageddon. Grunting, he rolled over on his bed, ultimately landing on the floor. 'Rinel could probably float me to the kitchen or something.' He thought.
A bara transforms into a magical shounen.
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ChibiGissy
Hella Cool Guy
Icon done by TenshiHanka/Otakrap
Posts: 1,115
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Post by ChibiGissy on Jan 12, 2016 8:53:45 GMT -6
A big muscular guy took his magical brooch and shouts “IT’S MAGIC TIME”. He begins to transform. He twirled around in the pastel aura background as magical energy surrounds him. The magical beams got close to surround his body and turn into beautiful pastel clothes. And that moment, his magical star wand pops up and appears before him. He grabs the wand and twirls it around for 10 seconds. He himself stops twirling around. He says “If you mess with my friends and other people around me, you will be sorry. That’s a promise!” He then posed as he sparkles, by putting his left hand on his hip while stick up two of his right fingers to make the peace sign.
(I tried.)
Someone doing a horrible job a dancing in front of the judges
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